Posts : 340 Join date : 2010-07-04 Age : 35 Location : Canada
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Sun Aug 22, 2010 9:28 pm
Also Scene 3 release has been pushed back
LunchIsGood Master Sergeant
Posts : 1097 Join date : 2010-06-15 Age : 28 Location : An island in USA
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Sun Aug 22, 2010 9:49 pm
I better be in it...eating lunch
PaddieBear Lance Corporal
Posts : 340 Join date : 2010-07-04 Age : 35 Location : Canada
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Sun Aug 22, 2010 11:00 pm
It was early in the morning around 6:30 AM about 10 minutes or so before the mission began. I really started to wonder what Bronx meant...I knew I had to find out one way or another, so I quickly snuck out of my bed quarters. I knew Bronx was giving the briefing in another room so I went into his office and started searching around for the written briefing. 8 minutes had passed....I finally found it, and as I read the title a sudden anger went through me like never before: Airstrike on Revern Bay (later codenamed Buccaneer Bay.) Then I began to cry, my family was there on a vacation...my wife, daughter and my son. 2 minutes passed and I heard Bronx’s footsteps.
“So, you found out...” He was going to say something else but I didn’t let him, I shouted at my superior and grabbed his finely made uniform. Tears began to stroll down my eyes onto his uniform. “HOW COULD YOU DO THIS!!? WHY?! YOU KNOW MY FAMILY IS THERE!” Bronx pushed me away, and began to explain... “Bear, I understand your pain...I experienced it first hand, not as an officer but as an ordinary Soldier. I was a young man at the time my only family was my brother and mother. My brother had defected to the Nationals and my mother was terribly ill, it was on this exact day that my brother visited my mother’s home while I was at my outpost. He was armed with a pistol and shot her...I’ll never forgive him for what he did! He is retired now and resides in Revern Bay, not only that but we have heard rumours of a National spy academy also residing in the area. I know your family means a lot to you but they mean nothing to me.”
He stopped and sighed...then I said, “You are doing it for your personal gain! Why you are no better than your brother, you are just the same cold hearted killer as he was. I don’t know why I don’t just kill you here and now.” Bronx chuckled, “Oh there is much more to it than that. Even if you were to kill me you’d be a wanted man.” I left the room enraged, but as I shut the door I started to hear him crying...that man’s past was mystery to me, he had probably gone through a whole lot worse than I ever did. Colonel Bronx hides his pain behind a tough man. I walked back to my bed quarters knowing that my family was going to die...every one of them. Then something came to my mind, I have to warn them! I quickly ran out of my bed quarters out of the base and into the airfield. The rest of the RSO was still here...they hadn’t taken off yet. I quickly snuck into a plane and started the engine; the RSO unit saw this and begged me to stop. I didn’t, I took off and planned a HALO jump. I knew I could save them...it would be hard and dangerous and I might even be branded a deserter, but even so my family is more important to me than myself.
LunchIsGood Master Sergeant
Posts : 1097 Join date : 2010-06-15 Age : 28 Location : An island in USA
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Sun Aug 22, 2010 11:18 pm
Gasp! A HALO jump? You don't have your jump wings yet. (Unless you did finish it and it just doesn't appear over there <---) By the way, I love the story so far.
Jeffay123 Lance Corporal
Posts : 795 Join date : 2010-05-25 Age : 28 Location : Wisconsin, US of A
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Sun Aug 22, 2010 11:24 pm
sehr gut paddie! your story deserves a cookie, but im all out
PaddieBear Lance Corporal
Posts : 340 Join date : 2010-07-04 Age : 35 Location : Canada
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Sun Aug 22, 2010 11:56 pm
LunchIsGood wrote:
Gasp! A HALO jump? You don't have your jump wings yet. (Unless you did finish it and it just doesn't appear over there <---) By the way, I love the story so far.
I got 'em many weeks ago or was it one week ago..either way I got 'em.
Just aren't showing up.
Kain Lance Corporal
Posts : 55 Join date : 2010-08-10 Age : 28 Location : Las Vegas, Nevada
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Mon Aug 23, 2010 1:39 am
Very good so far. I am hooked!
FlamingFireGuy Site Member
Posts : 30 Join date : 2010-08-11
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Fri Aug 27, 2010 3:38 am
Same here.
duckondrugs Private 1st Class
Posts : 1418 Join date : 2010-03-23 Age : 27 Location : north-east england
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Sun Aug 29, 2010 3:46 pm
more more MORE!
modernwarfare132 First Sergeant
Posts : 1287 Join date : 2010-02-19 Age : 28 Location : Pennsylvainia, USA
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Tue Aug 31, 2010 11:42 pm
bump i would like to see more
PaddieBear Lance Corporal
Posts : 340 Join date : 2010-07-04 Age : 35 Location : Canada
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Wed Sep 01, 2010 4:12 am
Don't worry I'm working on it
Just that I'm being slowed down due to other important things in my life
PaddieBear Lance Corporal
Posts : 340 Join date : 2010-07-04 Age : 35 Location : Canada
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Tue Sep 21, 2010 5:19 pm
The Final Scene of Part 1...Scene 4, now just to give my wonderful readers a taste of whats to come here is a small summary. Should be editing the summary into this, now then instead of the usual emotional breakdowns and undetailed fight/battle scenes...I'm going hardcore with the fight scenes here.
Please wait while I write out the summary for you guys!
duckondrugs Private 1st Class
Posts : 1418 Join date : 2010-03-23 Age : 27 Location : north-east england
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Tue Sep 21, 2010 5:26 pm
hey paddie. what about your other story, u know, favela wars?
PaddieBear Lance Corporal
Posts : 340 Join date : 2010-07-04 Age : 35 Location : Canada
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Tue Sep 21, 2010 5:29 pm
That story isn't mine, it is Frapnoos's.
By the way Scene 4 will be longer than usual due ot a huge increase in story devolpment.
paisaman First Sergeant
Posts : 1784 Join date : 2010-02-12 Age : 29 Location : Bogota. Colombia
Subject: Re: [Story] Forgotten Sins: Act 1, Part 1, Scene 1 Tue Sep 21, 2010 5:33 pm
wow, nice story Paddie, the character i play reminds me a bit of this dude:
